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She is an angel, beauty undefined,
Awe-inspiring, unlike any other.
Perfectly gorgeous, a gift to mankind,
In turn they swoon, one after another.

But an angel without wings is broken;
Hers were taken a hundred years ago.
The curse she bears is silent, unspoken,
But still she smiles, her beauty aglow.

What she wouldn't give for another chance,
But she knows she must live with her choices.
She stands unblinkingly, fixed in her stance,
Never once giving in to those voices.

Silently, she waits, for that fateful day,
When a mortal shall arrive in her life.
His feelings of lust shall be kept at bay;
Then, only then, shall she become his wife.
It's poetry times bitches :D

You can interpret this however you like :)

This is the first poem I've written since..... I started grade nine? Something like that. Anyways, hope you guys like :D
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:iconalfredolover:
AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So a renegade angel finds love? Idk. Interesting poem nonetheless. Keep on writing
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carla456 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No one said poetry had to make perfect sense.
Thanks.
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I never said It didn't make sense. Just pointing out what I thought of it. Oh, and I know well enough. Been writing for 2 years now
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carla456 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Cool. I've been writing pretty much my entire life.
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
In a way, we all can say that. I've just kept track of how long I've been doing it without it having to be some English homework or something. XD
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finishyourtea Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Student Writer
This is great! Keep writing!
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:iconcarla456:
carla456 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
I have some other poems posted if you're interested :)
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2012
Beautiful and sorrowful. I just love the first line. Wonderful job.
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carla456 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much :D
My fave line is probably... "Hers were taken a hundred years ago." :)
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:iconinthestarrynightsky:
InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2012
You're welcome. :)
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
Beautiful"D
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:iconcarla456:
carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
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:icona7xfan666:
A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
Welcome:D
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CausticSunrise Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very well written. Excellent job! :) I'm a poet too if you feel like taking a look at my work :)
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:iconcarla456:
carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
Sure, I'll have a look :)
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:iconcausticsunrise:
CausticSunrise Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! And thank you very much :)
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914four Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting. Well done!
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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POISONGRAPESawaiting Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you shroud her future in readers' suspense, good touch there--
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :D
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Noratcat Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
Excellent job I have to say :)
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:iconcarla456:
carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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Noratcat Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
You're very welcome :)
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DigitalPandora Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
wow i love it ^^ it's really inspiring me....would you mind if i drew something to illustrate how i see this poem? its so lovely :) i wish i could write like that
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much :D
Of course you can draw something to go along with it! I'd love to see how you interpret it :D
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DigitalPandora Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
whoo ok ^^ I SHALL DO THIS JUSTICE
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I SERIOUSLY HOPE SO :D
More poetry maybe possibly to come :XD:
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DigitalPandora Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
yay cant wait :3
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Probably with the hundred theme challenge. My next theme is "complicated: :XD:
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DigitalPandora Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Student Digital Artist
haha oh the irony
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EsotericAngel Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely! I really love this!
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:iconcarla456:
carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :D
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EsotericAngel Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're more than welcome!
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Shadowlovey Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Student General Artist
y u no tell me u a poet?
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Haha :XD:
You likey? :D
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Shadowlovey Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Student General Artist
XD i do
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
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This took me significantly less time than my last poem did :XD: Perhaps more poems to come? :D
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Shadowlovey Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Student General Artist
:la: yaaaaaaaay
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CarlosAE Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice.
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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CarlosAE Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome.
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everdeen13 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's hard to describe my feelings about this. It's quite unlike anything else I've read, but in a good way. I like it!
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much :D
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PokeSonicIndy Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
So the poem is about an angel whose wings was taken away and now she walks the earth until she becomes someone's wife?
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carla456 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Essentially, yes. There is symbolism behind it, however.
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